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Paragon: The Shadow Wars (2020)
Great idea that lacks good execution
I watched the 1st episode. Then I posted a comment on Facebook to the show's creator and producer.
"First, congratulations on accomplishing more than most in competing your project. You hired Mr. Trejo (much respect to him), obtained money to shoot in various global locations and hired actors. You sold it to Amazon Prime and NBC Universal TV. That's huge.
Honestly, I don't think I'll watch the rest of series.
The idea is intriguing, and I see the influence from other stories. It's the execution that needs refinement.
First you need to engage the audience immediately when the foundation story is not well known legend or myth. A prologue opening scroll or narration would be a good place to start. Tell the viewers the basic origin myth so there is a focus on the first act that arises from the myth. In this case, reapers looking for souls that try to run.
Insist the actors put more 'natural' tenor when speaking their lines. As the viewer, the script was said as if the most of the actors were still in rehearsal. No feeling behind the words, no natural body language, no facial expression. The script came off strongly stilted. Camera work was good, audio was terrible too often. For me CC was absolutely required because whole lines were inaudible mid delivery.
Costumes-- main actress' costume is such a tired trope. She is beautiful and well toned, but that athletic bra and bare midriff parachute pants ensemble is awful. The men are clothed in costumes that fit their roles. She deserves the same. Just do better. There are plenty of badass females on the screen from which you can create a suitable costume for yours that isn't 1980s high school boy bad dreams level. Make up on the heroine is great, and on her sister too. The priestess in the church had strong 1970s hooker make up. Distracted from the overall scene with the meeting of the congregation and the envoy. Seek advice from several women about female hero and villains looks. You can improve their look and feel to convey their character to your audience.
All is just my option of over 50 years as an avid Sci Fi, action and horror genre fan. You have potential, but need to step up to beyond the idea to execute and reach the next level. Regardless I'll be watching for your next effort in hopes of seeing better. Break a leg!"
Dead Still (2014)
Ugh! Even a viewing on TV is torture!
Bad acting, writing, and audio! I gave 1 star to video for the costumes. Absolutely a total waste of what little talent there was on screen, and that's generous at best. There's better high school work than whatever this is supposed to be.