Too much of the dialogue is lame and/or unnecessary.
"You want to know what is icky? Shooting an innocent man in cold blood." Oh please, how many times has this group experienced that? And this is why they are bringing in the Wolf?
"I'll work with anyone who can stop that from happening again." Really? They are going to stop all innocent people from getting killed in cold blood?
"A driverless truck? I mean, these guys are into some next-level stuff." Lame.
"I just want you to try and watch him." Try and... still? When oh when will the ignorance stop!
From Grammar Girl - Try to Versus Try and "If you use 'and', as in -- I am going to try and call Grammar Girl -- you are separating trying and calling. You are describing two things: trying and calling. When you use 'try to' -- as in I am going to try to call Grammar Girl -- you are using the preposition 'to' to link the trying to the calling."
Another option that works in some cases is to skip try to -- I am going to call Grammar Girl.
From Benjamin Dreyer, Chief Copyeditor at Random House Publishing.
"If you try and do something, someone will immediately tell you to try to do it, so you might as well just try to do it so no one will yell at you." Dreyer, Benjamin. Dreyer's English (p. 164). Random House Publishing Group. Kindle Edition.
As professional writers, we should work to make the language better.
"You want to know what is icky? Shooting an innocent man in cold blood." Oh please, how many times has this group experienced that? And this is why they are bringing in the Wolf?
"I'll work with anyone who can stop that from happening again." Really? They are going to stop all innocent people from getting killed in cold blood?
"A driverless truck? I mean, these guys are into some next-level stuff." Lame.
"I just want you to try and watch him." Try and... still? When oh when will the ignorance stop!
From Grammar Girl - Try to Versus Try and "If you use 'and', as in -- I am going to try and call Grammar Girl -- you are separating trying and calling. You are describing two things: trying and calling. When you use 'try to' -- as in I am going to try to call Grammar Girl -- you are using the preposition 'to' to link the trying to the calling."
Another option that works in some cases is to skip try to -- I am going to call Grammar Girl.
From Benjamin Dreyer, Chief Copyeditor at Random House Publishing.
"If you try and do something, someone will immediately tell you to try to do it, so you might as well just try to do it so no one will yell at you." Dreyer, Benjamin. Dreyer's English (p. 164). Random House Publishing Group. Kindle Edition.
As professional writers, we should work to make the language better.